Hi Seanfear
I enjoyed your poem very much. The regularity of the pace in verses and rhyme was pleasantly repeated. Bang on.

I liked how you used the first line of each verse as an introduction to a new line of thought, while each verse all together make up a very tidy and coherent 'whole'.

The only edit I'd like to see would be adding a 'yet' to the last line of the fifth verse so that it would read 'and yet politics follows the path'. I think that would flow on from the previous line better.

Most particularly I enjoy that you have taken a non cliche stance on Machiavelli. I always appreciate people who dare to be different. Go you!


Hope