Your narration is interesting.
Language and style are outstanding.
The character of the samurai is arresting.
Description of his momentous acts of bravery catch the reader's attention.

My thoughts and suggestions if you like.

Give me a physical picture of the Samurai.

A little family background of the samurai helps me in understanding his longing for the sword.

Who was his master? His father?

Create some dialog.

Show his mettle.

An example or two showing him in action would be impressive and interesting to the reader.

In other words add more flesh to the story.

Write on!




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