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My Tabby Tiger  [E]
Felix cuddles up sweetly in the evening, after a big day.
by H❀pe
Review of My Tabby Tiger  
Review by Kit
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi H❀pe ,

Welcome to Writing.Com! *Smile*

Overall Impression:

I saw that cute cat picture and I just had to read your poem! I, too, have a tabby companion and she is an excellent huntress. Much to my dismay at times.

I love how this poem begins with the image of a sweet, innocent cat just tired from his day... and then we learn why his day was busy! It made me smile, though, because one of my cats (I have two) caught a mouse a couple of days ago and, yes, they'll both chase butterflies and moths and other insects. I, too, have ran around the house rescuing small creatures. We have harness-and-lead trained them to prevent them from causing too much chaos and mayhem in the area, but those twitching toes whilst asleep sound all too familiar.

I enjoyed the imagery. I think any person who lives with a cat will recognise your descriptions. On the technical side of things, all reads well. Excellent work!

Suggestions:

I do have some suggestions, dear author. I hope that you will find them helpful!

Stanza 1:

*Snow2* or maybe its just...

'its' should be it's.

Stanza 3:

*Snow2* He catches butterflies also.
So, I...

That 'also' followed immediately by 'so' - like a double so - tripped me up a little. That might be worth playing around with. Perhaps the first line could be He catches butterflies, too. Something along those lines?

General Suggestion:

*Snow2* You use some punctuation in this poem, for which I am grateful. Punctuation helps the overall clarity and reading experience. I suggest going for full punctuation. That would make it perfect.

My Rating:

This is a cute, entertaining poem. I was happy to read it!

I did have a few suggestions. Nothing major, though. Therefore, I will give your poem a rating of 4.5 out of 5.

Orion and I thank you for sharing your work.

Write on!

Kit

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