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 How it feels to be guilty  [E]
This story is a brief description of the times I've felt guilty
by Kaya Rechelle Zerwis
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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#1300305 by Maryann


Hallo!
This one showed up on 'read and review'. The title intrigued me. The brief description and genres work well for the piece.

Suggestion for the layout: Use some line-spacing, and maybe change the font and size, to make it easier on the eye.

The piece itself:
I like the theme you've chosen. Yes, we do feel guilty at times and it's fine.
I appreciate your honesty in analysing the part you played in various incidents in your life and whether you were partly at fault for something. The tone of the piece is chatty, I feel like you are talking to me face-to-face.

SUGGESTION:
I think there is a distinction between feeling guilty when one is at fault (like the break up) or when you aren't actually at fault (like with your grandparents). Maybe you need to divide the essay into these two categories and talk about coping in two different ways.

Overall, a great theme and an honest piece.

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