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Review by Brian KC
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Rated: GC | (4.5)
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Hello Cinn,

In "You Break It, You Broke It," you've crafted a thought-provoking poem that delves into the intricacies of consent, power dynamics, and the consequences of crossing boundaries. This poem captivates the reader with its vivid imagery and evocative language, and I'd like to share my observations and thoughts on various aspects of your work.

The style of your poem is striking. The opening lines, "Her thighs wrapped tight with flypaper," immediately grab the reader's attention. The metaphor of flypaper conveys a sense of entrapment, and it's a powerful visual representation of the theme you're exploring. It's a stark reminder of how society often ensnares individuals (more specifically women) in uncomfortable or unwanted situations.

The theme of consent is central to this poem. The repetition of "How may 'NO's does it take?" emphasizes the importance of respecting boundaries and consent. It's a powerful and timely theme, shedding light on a critical societal issue. The poem highlights the need for open communication and mutual respect in relationships.

Your use of poetic devices is noteworthy. The description of "fingernail constellations" is a brilliant metaphor that effectively portrays the consequences of unwelcome advances. It's an example of how your imagery enhances the overall impact of the poem.

One suggestion I have is to consider expanding on the consequences or aftermath of the situation presented in the poem. This could provide a deeper insight into the emotional and psychological toll of such experiences. For example, you might explore the emotional aftermath of the individual whose boundaries were crossed.

"You Break It, You Broke It" is a powerful poem that skillfully addresses a pressing social issue. Your use of vivid imagery and metaphors enhances the impact of the poem. Consider further developing the emotional depth of the characters to engage the reader's empathy even more.

Sincerely,
Brian
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