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 I AM.....  [E]
Its a poem about myself
by Bash Thy Writer
Review of I AM.....  
Review by Brian KC
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Bash!

I've had the pleasure of reading your poem, "I AM…," and must commend you on your distinctive style and thought-provoking theme. The concise nature of the poem immediately captures attention, and your use of repetition adds a rhythmic quality that enhances the overall impact.

The introspective opening of the poem, with the repetition of "Way too," sets a reflective tone, inviting readers to contemplate the complexities within the speaker's identity. The contrasts you present, such as being "way too big" for some people and "way too happy" for sadness, create a vivid and engaging portrayal of the speaker's self-awareness.

Your style is notably bold and unapologetic, contributing to the poem's strength. The repeated use of "Way too" serves as a powerful device, emphasizing the speaker's assertiveness in defining themselves. Consider exploring additional stylistic elements or experimenting with line breaks to further emphasize key phrases, enhancing the overall visual and auditory experience.

The theme of self-identity and the rejection of societal expectations is clear and resonant. To deepen this exploration, you might consider providing specific examples or anecdotes that illustrate the speaker's defiance against societal norms. This could strengthen the emotional connection for readers, allowing them to relate more intimately to the speaker's journey.

The form of the poem, with its concise structure, aligns well with the theme of simplicity mentioned in the last line. However, you could experiment with enjambment or varied line lengths to add a layer of unpredictability, mirroring the unpredictability of the speaker's identity. This could enhance the overall flow and impact of the poem.

Your use of opposites and contradictions, such as being "way too cool" to be hot and "way too simple" to hold a grudge, contributes to the depth of the poem. Consider expanding on these contradictions, providing deeper explanations or vivid imagery that paints a more detailed picture of the speaker's multifaceted nature.

I found that, "I AM…" to be a compelling exploration of identity with its bold style and resonant theme. It’s possible to elevate the poem further, if you give further consideration, with experimentation anllowing additional stylistic elements, specific examples to enhance the theme, and exploring varied line structures. Happy 1st WDC Account Anniversary!

Keep up the excellent work!

Sincerely,

Brian
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