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 Once Upon a Thanksgiving  [E]
Poem for Thanksgiving. Happy Thanksgiving
by Wolfius
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Wolfius

Seems appropriate to consider your poetry about the season, incorporated in this anniversary review.

Upon diving into "Once Upon A Thanksgiving," I find myself immersed in the delightful rhythm of its verses. The playful use of rhyme and the sing-song quality create an inviting atmosphere, drawing me into the heartwarming spirit of the holiday. The poem's brevity mirrors the simplicity of Thanksgiving, emphasizing the essence of gratitude and familial bonds.

The style of your poem, characterized by its succinct lines and whimsical tone, allows for an accessible and enjoyable read. The repetition of ending sounds in "chompin'" and "giving" adds a musical quality, enhancing the overall cadence. This musicality resonates with the festivity of Thanksgiving, making the poem feel like a lively celebration captured in words.

Thematically, your work beautifully captures the essence of Thanksgiving — focusing not only on the tangible elements of turkeys and pumpkins but, more importantly, on the intangible aspects of family and love. The simplicity of the language becomes a strength as it mirrors the straightforward nature of the holiday itself, emphasizing the value of gratitude over material abundance.

In terms of poetic devices, the rhyme scheme contributes to the poem's harmony. The AABB scheme in the first two lines establishes an expectation, while the departure from it in the third and fourth lines surprises the reader, adding a touch of unpredictability. This subtle deviation mirrors the unexpected joys found in moments of genuine gratitude.

One suggestion to consider is the exploration of metaphor or symbolism to deepen the thematic layers. Introducing metaphorical elements, such as comparing the act of giving thanks to the blooming of flowers or the warmth of a hearth, could add richness to your already charming piece.

In conclusion, "Once Upon A Thanksgiving" is a delightful ode to the spirit of gratitude, encapsulating warmth and joy of the holiday. Consider experimenting with metaphor to add depth, but overall, your poem radiates the heartwarming essence of Thanksgiving as it stands. Have a wonderful season and happy 1st birthday in our writing community.

Sincerely,

Brian
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