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Wraith of Time  [E]
Time can turn a cage into a palace, and a prisoner into a Queen.
by Angels in my Ear
Review of Wraith of Time  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY!! "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


A Belated Happy Account Anniversary, Aundria:

As I immersed myself in "Wraith of Time," the poignant metaphor of a caged bird standing on the grave of her dreams immediately struck a chord. The opening stanza set a somber tone, with the bird warbling an aria on the burial ground of unfulfilled aspirations. The theme of captivity and the impact on one's dreams becomes the focal point, unraveling a narrative of stifled potential. Very familiar to me, in my own pursuits.

The poem's style does well to capture the emotional weight of confinement. The juxtaposition of the bird's past life being an opera, and the current reality of a prison, paints a stark contrast. This stylistic choice highlights the transformative power of freedom and the subsequent loss when confined. The use of "trills a mournful refrain" intensifies the sense of sorrow, echoes the bird's lament within this metaphorical prison.

In terms of form, the poem adheres to a structured yet fluid pattern, mirroring the passage of time. The progression…remembering a life without bars to the monotony of repeating ballads…reflects the gradual erosion of hope and creativity in the face of confinement. The choice to present the bird's songs as unchanging over the years adds the layer of melancholy, emphasizes the stagnation within the cage.

Poetic devices, particularly the choice to draw inspiration from Maya Angelou's "Caged Bird," add depth to your poem’s narrative. The quote from Eowyn in "The Lord of the Rings" further enriches the thematic exploration, underscoring the fear of being confined and losing the opportunity for greatness. These intertextual references enhance the poem's resonance, connects it to broader literary themes of captivity and lost potential. For me, this resonates as a suppressed writer. We often get stuck in life, in our choices where to remain. My voice, stifled, cannot find a forum. Effectual, this poem, in getting a response from me.

As for any suggestions, it might be a good idea to consider exploring additional sensory details to evoke a stronger emotional response. That’s if you should revisit this older poem. Descriptions of the physical and emotional toll on the caged bird could amplify a reader's empathy. For example, getting further into the bird's physical state or the changing colors of its feathers over time might add some vividness to the portrayal.

It was a pleasure to have perused your poetry to find this particular piece to consider for my feedback. Hope you enjoy the rest of this month’s account anniversary.

Sincerely,

Brian
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