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Flight Home  [E]
A sestina about growing up
by fyn
Review of Flight Home  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Fyn,

I came across your sestina "Flight Home," in a list of Hooves’ favorites. I’m not on the list. Oh, well. I enjoyed your poem, captivated by the poignant theme of departure and the cyclic nature of life.

The opening stanzas weave a vivid scene of geese in flight, invoking a sense of nostalgia and inevitability. The use of the bow as a symbol adds a layer of metaphorical resonance, connecting the speaker's personal journey with the graceful yet determined movements of the geese.

Your style, characterized by evocative imagery and reflective introspection, seamlessly integrates with the sestina form. The repetition of end-words creates a subtle rhythmic cadence, enhancing the thematic coherence. For instance, the recurrence of "bow" echoes both the physical curvature of the boat and the emotional bowing to life's currents, creating a subtle harmony.

The thematic exploration of goodbyes and the passage of time is masterfully interwoven. The recurring motif of waves serves as a metaphor for the undulating nature of life's transitions, emphasizing the inevitability of change. The winter without goodbyes becomes a poignant moment, crystallizing the impact of absence and the emotional weight of departure.

Your use of poetic devices, such as personification in "Clouds overhead gathered gray with unfallen snow," adds depth to the narrative. The winter setting becomes a metaphor for the emotional chill of loss, underscoring the interconnectedness of nature and human experience. Perhaps, you could explore further avenues for metaphor and symbolism to amplify the emotional resonance in this piece.

In terms of suggestions, you might experiment with varying line lengths to create a dynamic visual impact. For example, elongating lines during moments of reflection and shortening them during impactful revelations can enhance the reader's engagement. If that even fits with a sestina, but with another endeavor of a similar theme.

It was a pleasure reading one of Hooves’s (Mom’s) favorites. I’ll go sulk in a corner now. *Laugh*

Sincerely,

Brian
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