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Old Winds  [E]
Always called to remember the 'once-was'...
by fyn
Review of Old Winds  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Again Fyn,

I’ve returned for another. You’ve featured my stuff many times in newsletters and realize I should offer something back for the noteworthy attention.

"Old Winds" is a captivating exploration of time, change, and the enduring echoes of the past. Your poem beautifully weaves together the elements of style, theme, form, and poetic devices to create a vivid tapestry of imagery and reflection.

Stylistically, your use of vivid language and evocative descriptions immediately draws the reader into the natural world you've crafted. The phrase "Old winds blow through canyons carved by time" sets a contemplative tone, inviting readers to join in a journey through the ages. The consistent, almost rhythmic cadence of your lines contributes to the meditative atmosphere, allowing the reader to be immersed in the unfolding scenes.

Thematically, "Old Winds" eloquently explores the passage of time and the interconnectedness of nature. The imagery of canyons carved by time, dancing waters, and towered granite alludes to the enduring landscape that bears witness to the ages. The poem becomes a meditation on the cyclical nature of life, capturing the essence of change while emphasizing the underlying sameness that persists.

Structurally, your poem embraces a free verse form, allowing for a natural flow that mirrors the organic themes within the verses. The fluidity of your lines enhances the sense of movement, mirroring the winds and waters that play central roles in your imagery. The varied lengths of your stanzas contribute to the poem's dynamic rhythm, creating a harmonious balance between reflection and momentum.

Poetic devices enrich the sensory experience of your poem. The alliteration in "scoured by dust" and the consonance in "pummeled into a life slurry" create aural textures that enhance the imagery. The repetition of the word "Old" becomes a refrain, anchoring the poem and emphasizing the timeless quality of the elements you describe. Consider exploring more metaphorical language to amplify the emotional depth of your reflections.

As for suggestions, you might consider experimenting with line breaks to emphasize key moments or images. For instance, breaking the line after "a poem of change and sameness" could add emphasis to this central idea. Additionally, explore expanding on specific images or metaphors to provide readers with even more vivid connections to the themes of your poem.

It’s been a pleasure considering your poems for feedback. Happy Holidays! *SnowMan* *snowball*

Sincerely,

Brian
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