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Thankful Wish  [E]
A Cinquain
by H❀pe
Review of Thankful Wish  
Review by Past Member 'rupali'
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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It is truly a good tiny free-verse poetry that expresses a special thanks to the narrator's family for spending some lovely moments with the family. Expression is indeed great. There is no doubt about that. A correction should be made.
But, the family is such a place where we feel comfortable after a hectic scheduled day. It is obvious. So, thanks should be given to a person who belongs outside of the family. The person may be a friend or any other known person but not should belong to the family. A family member should always do for other family members.
I also observed an error. It is a technical error. In a Cinquain, the fourth line should contain the right where the poet enters nine. The correction should be made.


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