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 My Mind's Place  [E]
What a wonderful place
by strlcuckoo
Review of My Mind's Place  
Review by JACE
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi strlcuckoo . Hello. I found your offering in the Read & Review section.

I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "My Mind's Place" .

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. I like reading form poetry as there are tangible things to which I can refer when offering any feedback, such as rhyme, which you did well.

The feelings you evoke in your piece are obviously heartfelt. But I wonder about the almost overwhelming amount of repetition with the one line: Within my mind lies a special place

I have no trouble with some repetition. But this line is half the poem. As a reader, I found myself skipping forward instead of reading every line.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* I found no issues with the writing mechanics of your poem.    

*Star* My Rating.  4.0. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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