Hi, 💙 Carly , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "I Write - Decade Edition - Roaring 20's"  "Something Is Wrong Here" , because I discovered it on the "I Write in 2024"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the lights not coming on. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first person point of view and voice are good choices for this story because they reveal the speaker's emotions.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.