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Finally  [E]
Trying my hand at elevenie/reversed elevenie poetry
by Nat Davison
Review of Finally  
Review by JACE
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Nat Davison . Hello. I found your offering in the Read & Review section

I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Finally" .

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. I absolutely love form poetry. There are so many different forms available for writers to discover. Your chosen form, the Elevener, is one I've explored.

Your form and substance is spot on. I enjoyed the read. I wonder why the first word is in bold--I don't think it's necessary.

I would add something about what is required in this form at the bottom for your reader. I suspect many folks won't know what is required in this form.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet*  I think you need a comma after your first word:   Finally,  

         *Bullet*  Also, I believe rain needs to be plural as written to read better.   rains. 

*Star* My Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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