Hi, Beck Firing back up! , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The first battle" , because I discovered it on the "I Write in 2024"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Artemis standing atop the knoll. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I suggest placing a blank line between the paragraphs so that the story is easier to read.

I like: My favorite part is the climax. I like this part because it showed Artemis at his best.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the action.