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 Hey just testing out this website  [E]
Me just testing out how to create an item
by Peninsky4the5thtime
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hi Peninsky4the5thtime .

I'm JACE - House Targaryen , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Hey just testing out this website" , that I found on the Read & Review section.

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. I admit, normally I would pass on reviewing a piece like this. Technically this is a static item, complete with item number, ratings, etc., and thus is reviewable.

Creating your first static item is a major step in learning how to navigate such a complex site. And you've done this step successfully.

I'd like to offer some advice and some facts. You currently have a Free membership. As such, you can create and host only ten items. Check out "Compare Free and Paid Membership Benefits"  for a listing of the things a free membership offers. I assume you joined WDC to enhance and improve your writing abilities. For that move, I applaud you. Use those available static items to display your stories and essays. Members will review them with some hopefully helpful feedback.

Now that you've taken that step to create an item, you should consider letting the rest of us know a bit about you. That means completing your Bio-Block and Biography tab. No one writes in a vacuum; help from others is necessary for improvement. Check "Get Started With Your Account"  for how to do this.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* Regarding the mechanics of your item, your sentence just runs on. Consider making it two sentences and including a period at the end of each. It will be more readable.    

         *Bullet* For future items, consider double spacing all paragraphs to add a little white space for your readers. It is different reading from a screen than from a book.    

*Star* My Rating.  3.0.  Currently as written, this is an average item. Without characters, plot, and the like, it's hard to rate any higher.

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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