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Photographic Memory  [E]
An interesting object in the middle of nowhere inspires a photographer ... then a writer.
by MJones
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, MJones .

I'm Jace, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Photographic Memory"  for the "~ The Poet's Place Cafe~"  group. *Smile*

*Puzzle4* Form. I don't know if this poem aligns witha specific form but it consists of five two-line stanzas each with a a-a rhyme. The poem uses a photograph for a prompt

*Note1* Overall Impression. First, I thought the photograph was a powerful image, worthy of a thoughtful poem. Your poem is a testament to this image and to all who read it.

You are right--that rusted vehicle IS the focal point for both your image and the poem.

*Exclaim* Technical or Editorial Considerations. I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your poem.

         *Bullet* I had a problem with reading your first line. I found it awkward to read. The word "so" is the problem. Either of the following works:   You catch my eye so, with a single click   You catch my eye with a single click

*Thumbsup* Favorite Part.   Your picture.

*Star* Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinions.


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JACE

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