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 Yesterday was like No Other Day  [13+]
Writing Prompt: Start with this phrase: Yesterday was like no other day.
by IE
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


Hi IE .

I'm JACE - House Targaryen , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Yesterday was like No Other Day"  in honor of your WDC anniversary. I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. A good free verse effort. I enjoyed your use of both imagery and alliteration.

Using the waves of the sea to cleanse is something we each can see in our mind. The powerful waves pound rocks into sand--certainly it can provide release.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet*  As a reader, I need a comma after waves. Without it I rush headlong into your plea without the proper consideration I think you desire.   Crashing waves I beseech you  

*Star* My Rating.  4.5.  An above average offering.

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering, and I look forward to seeing you around in the coming year. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.

Reviewed by
JACE

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