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 I am jobless   [E]
I am jobless due to an overachiever.
by Ashok Banerjee
Review of I am jobless  
Review by StephBee
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "I am jobless "  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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*Reading* THE POEM

Does being an overachiever disadvantage others?

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The poem tackles a very topical subject for the modern day and challenges the reader to look at the differences between the overachiever and the jobless. Is there a middle ground? Could the unemployed storyteller have been more tactful in getting his point across? Would that have kept him the job? Questions to ponder.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no set rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. There is a (") after matches your character which seems oddly placed.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

The descriptions are very "to the point," for example -- "he stares at me." In that regard, the descriptions do a good job of matching the harsh tone of the poem.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem is easy to read. The mood of the poem is somber. No likes losing a job.

The poem reflects the reality of life. Even friends, who gifted with an advantage, find it a struggle to think of others when money is involved. "Money makes people funny" is an expression that rings true time and time again. Another thing I thought of - when two sides are polar opposite, how can there be reconciliation?

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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