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 Death's Door  [E]
A hard truth brings realization and healing.
by Present Tense
Review of Death's Door  
Review by Beholden
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Review of Death's Door by Present Tense

I like this. You certainly know how to tell a story. And this is told in a straightforward, simple style that suits the tale and doesn't become too dark - which is an obvious danger when writing of this subject.

It's an imaginative story too - I don't think I've ever reacd about someone cleaning up their own grave site before. Yet somehow it isn't a shock in the end at all. Everything keeps the rather quiet tone of the whole piece. And maybe that's a problem in the end. I think the tale does need a bit more drama to boost the ending. Not anything silly, like ghosts rising from the grave or zombies appearing from the mausoleums - more of a sudden understanding in the narrator, perhaps of a new depth to his relationship with his father, or a change in attitude that leads to the name and dates on the gravestone gradually fading away. Something like that might give the story more purpose, more pzazz at the end.

But it's just a suggestion. As it stands, the story succeeds pretty well, if a little purposeless. It's well enough written to give enjoyment anyway. And who knows how we'd all react in similar circumstances? I dare say I might remain as cool as this narrator.

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