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 Before the Winter  [E]
A short little poem about love and the seasons.
by James (Himura)
Review of Before the Winter  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Exclaim* Hi James and Happy Anniversary! I'm glad I came across your port because if I didn't, I wouldn't have found this very beautiful poem.

I thought that this poem could be made into a song. Have you ever considered that? Not only does it talk about seasons, but it also hints of the seasons of love. I felt that was lovely and intertwined the seasons with thoughts of romance in a most creative way.

My favorite stanza, if I had to pick one, might be the third stanza.
There, the narration spoke about waiting, no matter how long, and keeping the flame alive.

The middle stanzas were sweet. I saw true poetic words, in the talk about how thoughts of the summer will keep them warm in the winter's breeze. That was very pretty and creative.

The last stanza, I though, was done well. I liked how you brought your readers back to the first line of the very first stanza, by making a similar last line about, 'before the winter'.

Your poem reads well, flows smoothly, and stands perfectly the way it is. However, I had a thought to play with colored fonts. If it were me, I'd center the poem, and make each stanza in colors, almost like a sunset! It might look similar to this:
This could
be your
Very beautiful
poem

Anyway, that's just an idea which came to my mind since this poem mentioned seasons and love. Seasons are usually colorful, and love is sometimes associated with a sunset. You might even be able to come up with a better color scheme than the quick example which I offered above.


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