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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation

A Review From The Iron Bank Of Braavos

Hi Don, I am Megan, one of the sly foxes.

Title: Conduct Becoming

First Impression: I had a guy in high school who bullied me and others. I had to read this hoping this guy would get what was coming to him for being a jerk. I was drawn to this and wanted to read this. It didn't disappoint. He traveled on a tram a lot so I knew he was bound to get more then he bargained for. I read on.

What needs your attention: A light changed him. I was thinking maybe a Nun would swat him and I was hoping for that. Maybe this could be considered along with the light. Otherwise, everything in this poem was handled.

What part I liked best: Graham singing I'm bad. The Nun and priest keeping their eye on him. The light. Maybe the light was from God and it went through the bully. The point was played out and the bully learned a lesson.

Overall Impression: Looks like this was fun to write. The rhyme pattern worked out well. I wish the bully I knew would have learned a lesson. A good style and easy to follow. Entertaining. A good presentation.

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