Hello:
Bobby Lou,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you a "Game of Thrones"  review and rate it. I came across your story, Katie's Babies while surfing those members maintaining Black Cases. I greatly enjoyed reading it, and I hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression:

I enjoyed this story very much. It captured my attention and held it until the end. I thought the descriptions of the setting was very vivid and effective. The structure of it being through the narrator's POV was very effective. I didn't have a problem "hating" Mary.

Plot: This is a story about a wicked, demented young woman has inherited her parents house following their death. It tells of her personality and the wicked deeds she was guilty of and how she ended up paying for those deeds. It interested me very much.

Style/Tone:

Your word choices, sentence structure, and figurative language choices were very effective for the descriptions.

Scene/Setting:

The time, place and setting characteristics flowed smoothly and worked well together.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:

I saw no issues in this area.

Characters:

The character was well-developed and believable.

Dialogue:

There was no dialogue

Suggestions:

I cannot offer suggestions for improvement because I feel the piece was well-written.

Write On!

Kristina

The views and opinions in this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and, therefore, do not necessarily reflect the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer, and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .