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 Spooky Mission  [13+]
Andrew embarks on a mission to a spooky place. Will he succeed or fail is to be witnessed.
by Ben
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Ben. I am Megan, one of the sly foxes.

Title: Spooky Mission

First Impression: This is a spooky story and I thought it involved ghosts but it was a paranormal of another kind. I was intrigued and so I had to read more to see what was going on. I read this and will be giving my observations. I wasn't disappointed. I was spellbound and curious.

What needs your attention: I really don't know what needs improving. It was a vampire and not a ghost. The vampire didn't win and that is a good thing. I would like to know what Emily, the vampire looked like.

What part I liked best: This is a castle, not a haunted house. An old man and huis man servant. I like the man servant term. I like that Andrew was fighting a vampire and not a ghost. The characters are well defined and so is the storyline.

Overall Impression: Looks like you spent time with this. A good style and easy to follow. I a glad I read this in the daytime and not at night. Creative and colorful. Spooky an dark. Looks like the mission was successful. A good style. I like the gothic effect of the castle. I wonder if Emily is related to Dracula. An excellent presentation.

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