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The A-Team Cake and Buster Dog  [E]
... half an hour before the birthday guests were to arrive, disaster struck ...
by foxtale
Review by Kit
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi foxtale ,

Happy Anniversary Month! This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+]. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

As someone who was in primary school when The A-Team first landed on our screens, this was a trip down memory lane. I can clearly recall the van, and the antics of the team. My favourites were Hannibal Smith and Murdock!

How lovely that you wanted to give your boy such a fabulous cake! Even in its first form it sounds highly creative and I think any kid would have been over the moon with it. Unfortunately, when pets are around, things tend to go not quite according to plan, as happened here.

That Buster, he definitely made certain that he received his fair share! The way that you describe the situation is delightful. And I absolutely love your solution to the problem! It's genius! Sure, there was a bit of luck involved finding the items to place on the 'rocks', but there was a lot of creative thinking involved and it saved the day - your child's cake was the best ever, to him and his friends!

You have a wonderful writing voice, dear Foxtale. It's inviting, and engaging, and I love its warm tone. All in all, I think that you have done a wonderful job.

Suggestions:

I only have one suggestion, and it's a tiny one:

Paragraph 7:

*Snow2* “We could turn the cake around” I said

Just a comma missing here: "We could turn the cake around," I said

My Rating:

This is a simply delightful tale that truly made me smile. You have a way with words!

I did have one suggestion, but it was tiny. I do not feel that it should affect the rating of this item. I will give it a well-earned 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work.

Write on!

Kit

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