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Who's the best Ice Skater?
by StephBee - House Targaryen

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Review of The Cutting Edge

Review by Nixie

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Rated: E

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Hi StephBee - House Targaryen

Nixie here. I found your work here "The Shameless "Plug" Page"

First thoughts: A movie has the same title as your story. And I don't think the brief description suits the plot. Yours is a powerful story, and I never had the impression that this was about who the better skater was. I'm thinking: "Love on the Ice" for the title. Just my mind skating along. lol

I wasn't savvy with all the technical terms, but nothing could take away the image in my mind. I felt transported just reading. Ice skating is a gorgeous sport, and wow, that video gave my heart a lift. I was almost speechless when it ended. Her precision was astounding.

On a side note, when it came time to learn my first jump, I fell and broke my arm. lol

The descriptions were tantalizing, from the outside of the building all the way to the interior and then spilling over into the characterizations of Alyssa and Yuri.

Somewhere in here, I found two oversights. 'purse' should be 'pursue' and somewhere else, I think you meant 'skates' rather than 'shoes. I hope those two comments are enough to help you spot what I saw.

Here, in the words, I've met two young people who defied the politics that always get in the way of everything. How cool would it be if they ended up as skating partners? I prefer couples skating to single.

I liked it when Alyssa said 'Udachi'. I had to look it up, which is double fun for me.

Last comment-did you choose 'romance' as a genre? Because this is definitely a romantic story, both for love of ice skating and for Yuri and Alyssa. Nicely done!