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Review #4742666
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 The Smiling Rabbit  [13+]
The monsters are coming.
by Abby Gayle
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones" , I am in no way endorsing the GoT franchise or identifying as a fan thereof. I’m here to help my team win *Smile*

Whoa, this was good. When I saw the Dark genre and the way it was headed, I didn’t know what to expect. Usually when stories are dark here, they’re dark. But you’ve brought a soul shaking relief to the end of the story, as we see Caitlin peacefully giving up her life for the little girl to have her mother back. I don’t want to wax too “Christian” on anyone here, but this is a fine example of a parable or metaphor inspired by and pointing to the great sacrifice of Jesus. The sacrificial element is a classic and memorable staple of good stories for a reason.

You’ve brought together eeriness, danger and surreal elements like a mysterious underwater being to create a world that could easily be a short movie, with strongly visual elements that draw us in and keep us looking forward to what happens next. Your prose is clear and simple, and I see nothing to correct or suggest to change. As a story written for a contest, it takes up the prompt excellently and creates an unforgettable moment. I almost cried at the end, in a good way.

Now that the contest is over, you can add a third genre to it. I would suggest “Death,” but there are other possibilities.

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