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 |  | "Born before the Midnight Bell Tolls"  [18+] A Brief Comedy of Horror  |
| (4.5)| Hallo ԜԜ On The Road Again! ! I will be reviewing your work ""Born before the Midnight Bell Tolls"" on behalf of "House Targaryen Points" for "Game of Thrones"  Content: This is a short story that centres around the un-remembered events of a party held in the narrator's honour of her 'birth'. How then is she to explain the strange haunting/possession that refuses to let her be? Pluses:Okay, I have to confess that this took a couple of reads, but I did end up cracking up after reading the last paragraph.  You really had us going there, didn't you?Now, is your narrator an actual witch or is she just happy she wasn't actually born on Halloween? Why was she so dramatic in the need to run away and hide? Although I'm thinking all of this has to do with one too many tequila shots. I, again, marvel at your ability to paint scenes vividly. In this case, the morning after the shenanigans at the bar. Where did handsome man go? Had handsome man with the moustache even been there in the first place? Was he just a figment of her imagination? She really is an unreliable POV especially when you get to the end and you hear the voice message. Good grief!   Nice twist indeed. Suggestions:Here are a few things I noticed while reading. Please remember that these are only my suggestions/opinions and it's ultimately up to you to choose what works best. >>The next morning, I find (found) myself lying in my bloomers (only to match the rest of the tense in that paragraph as this was set in the past)    Aside from my little nitpick up there, this was a fun read! Thanks so much for sharing and keep on writing.    Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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