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Final Goodbye  [13+]
A love story
by Ԝ€ß☆ԜiʈCH
Review of Final Goodbye  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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"Game of Thrones Hello fellow writer. My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.
Title: Final Goodbye
First Impression: This is a heart-breaking, yet beautiful story of love. It is not easy typing with tears rolling down my cheeks. Alzheimer's is a devastating illness that steals everything from both the sufferer and their family. Most likely Helena would not know or recognize sorrow and regret. Sam however bears it all alone. I have known people struck/blindsided by this in their fifties.
What needs your attention: "She wanted to be neurosurgeon." Oops, the word 'a' is missing. may I suggest this in the second paragraph. "Helena was also attracted to him." Later when you describe Sam meeting the parents I suggest moving that 'also' to read " he planned to also be a chemical engineer."
What part I liked best: "Sam drank in every second of her arms around him like a sponge dropped into its first bucket of water." This is a fantastic sentence and a very apt metaphor. It describes this special moment perfectly. This piece of writing is saturated with emotion. There is the exhilaration of first love. There is the growth of deepening love. There is the thrill of graduation and establishing careers. There is the sorrow of learning they were infertile. There is the sheer helplessness, the futility interwoven amongst the perils of Alzheimer's. But above all the abiding love shines through. Helena and Sam knew and shared love.
Overall Impression: This story is poignant and bittersweet. Love is discovered, reciprocated, shared and then irretrievably altered. Sam and Helena seem so real and vibrant. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure! What does the fox say??? Listen carefully.
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