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Skip  [E]
A young boy needs his dog. Writer's Cramp entry 4/8/24 - 956 words - Winning Entry
by IE
Review of Skip  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Good afternoon, IE

Congratulations of the Cramp win. Nice story about a boy looking for his pet dog, and that you managed to use all the prompt words and maintain the flow and story is well done indeed. Not a scary spooky mystery, but a kind one showing all the love Barny has for his dog Skip.
Relatable, and honestly made me think of one time I lost dog in a storm storm, I followed her tracks in the snow with a hot dog. I wonder how old Barney is? Old enough to have some teenager thoughts, but young enough to still have his dad drive him around, How old is Skip? Would him missing be because he still a puppy or old. Parents seem a little overprotective.
I liked this story, and see no punctuation errors. Well edited.

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