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 Snowed In  [E]
A woman stops at a cozy lodge during a blizzard
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW

This is a review for "Snowed In"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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*Reading* THE STORY

Megan has to stop at a lodge when a blizzard hits.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

The ending is satisfying in a personal kind of way. We're worried for Megan, but we know she's safe, and now it's an opportunity for her to "power down" and relax, and she may not have had that chance in a long time.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person limited from Megan's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's a lot of description to set the scene. I liked: "Megan took a sip from the steaming mug of hot chocolate she'd ordered in the dining room." It put me right in the moment with Megan.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: rural, traveling setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader, and it's why Megan is in a pickle right now, due to the blizzard.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Megan

Megan sounds like a woman with common sense as she packs expecting a snow storm and has enough sense to find a lodge when the blizzard picks up. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is a good fit for the vinyette and the opening draws the reader in. If anything, I would have liked to have seen this developed a little more. Maybe Megan meets a nice man at the lodge and strikes up a friendship? Or meets an old friend? It's mostly narration, which is fine. You could always develop her more as a character. Overall, it's a nice vinyette that develops the setting well.



Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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