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The Coffee Monkey  [E]
Our morning coffee - with a little help from the animal kingdom (485 words)
by foxtale
Review of The Coffee Monkey  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Storyline: The author focuses on their life, as a new puppy has been thrown into the mix. He lays out his morning routine, family life, and how, after all these years, his wife still appreciates him.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: *Thumbsupl*

Description: You made it easy to see your morning rituals, your family life, and how you felt about getting a puppy after the dog had passed away. I liked the description of your youngest daughter rushing to get off to school, and finding moments to bring up the puppy. I could see Marsha under the covers, poking out her head just enough to reply to your monkey comment.

Overall Impression: A solid short story. It's difficult to fill that void after having a pet for so long. It's challenging to say no to our children, and getting the new puppy would still keep up the usual schedule you have made for the morning. The backstory filled in nicely, letting the reader know how life used to be as opposed to now and the impending empty nest.

Final Thoughts: The comment about getting a monkey to make the morning coffee instead of a dog was funny, and I liked that your wife ran with it. There is nothing quite like being appreciated for the simple things you do.




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