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 Over My Dead Body  [E]
Mom muttered these words once too often.
by SandraLynn Team Florent!
Review of Over My Dead Body  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello SandraLynn Team Florent!! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones.

*Reading* From a woman who loves to speak in cliche sentences, leaves her last cliche on her own tombstone. The narrator, her child reflects back at the many different cliches spoken over the years from her mother. But even she is not expecting the words inscribed on her tombstone.

Title and Description - You title grabbed my attention and your description urged me to read on.

Character - The daughter's emotions come through loud and clear with your words. Her sadness is palpable over the loss of her mother.

Setting - The setting is an intimate one of mom and daughter. Both before the mom passed, and after.

What I Liked Best - The revealing of the tombstone. *Laugh*

Below are a few suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit.

*Bookstack3*
I heard her gasps for air.

I heard her gasp for air.


*Peng* to my Mother she


Comma needed after Mother


*Notepady* and allergy


Comma needed after allergy


*Pencil* over night


overnight


*Books4* current tragedy,


No comma needed.


*Peng* finger nails


fingernails


*Tackr* once believe


once believed


*Bookopen* Yes please.


Comma after Yes


*Penr* Finally the moment

Comma after Finally

Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed it.

*Heart* Tracey

"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister
House Lannister image for G.o.T.



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