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Kovu's Second Life  [ASR]
A live-at-home college student wants a pet of her own.
by NanoWriMo2018 Into the Earth
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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My name is Angelica, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Kovu's Second Life

First Impression: The speaker cautiously opens the door only to find their efforts failed to keep Kovu from going loose into the house. They loved the kitten and had rescued it from the streets. Kovu went into the living room and dad was in a room next to the living room. So the speaker did their best to hide the fact they were looking for their kitten. Dad came close to finding out but the speaker made distracting noises. So dad didn't seem to notice. When the speaker got out of class they decided to go back home and realized they had left the door unlocked. Dad was in the room with Kovu.

The speaker has a love for cats and love this cat to death, calling it their pet even though they face the risk of having to get rid of it when their parents find out about it. I think it's a happy ending though because dad might actually change his mind about not allowing another cat to be in the house after meeting Kovu.

What needs your attention:
"A long, black, furry arm shot our from under the couch." out

What part I liked best: Fears might actually be not needed to be faced after all. Though dad sitting with Kovu could mean anything.

Overall impression: I enjoyed reading this story. Through fears to the final moment when dad discovered the cat it sounded like Kovu had had the best life in the bedroom. The escape was a close call but dad may have had a suspicion because of it. Good job and keep up the good work!

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

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