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Fly On A Wall Short Stories  [E]
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by Itchybarn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Title: Fly On A Wall Short Stories

Hi Itchybarn: I am Megan, one of the sly foxes.

First Impression: These are conversations. The saying goes, I wish I was a fly on a wall. A fly sometimes get hit with a flyswatter. I thought I would read this and give my observations. Bits and pieces of conversations are nice. A fly goes here and there and hears things but he can't tell anyone anything. Your secrets would be safe with a fly. Maybe a mouse was listening, too. WE never know.

What needs your attention: I really wasn't sure what to suggest. These are parts of eight different conversations. This is what the fly heard. He buzzes around and gets to hear things. These conversations are interesting.

The part I liked best: A guy helping his friend move. A Spy and a listening device. Gummy bears for lunch. IFO? A flying object? A tree that was supposed to stay up and not fall. We overhear conversations in public and we pretend we don't. I shake my head at that.

Overall Impression: The parts of the conversations give you ideas of what goes on in other's lives. A cat saying it looked like meow because the person had a triangle on his head. I like the humor in this. Creative and colorful. A good style. Easy to follow and looks like this was fun to write. A good presentation. Thanks for making my day reading your items.

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