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 The Great Ship   [18+]
The final minutes on the Titanic, and they did their best.
by Winchester Jones
Review of The Great Ship  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW

This is a review for "The Great Ship "  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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*Reading* THE STORY

The Titanic is going down. The story takes a look at 3 different scenarios into how people handled the sinking of the ship.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I really think the vinyette format worked well here. We meet Joseph who is going to play "Nearer to God to Thee," but has never gotten it quite right, A young couple who wants to experience something they never have before, and a group of men drinking and smoking, as if that's all they can do as the ship sinks.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "The ship was now listing thirty degrees to starboard.." The author used a good economy of word to paint an accurate visual in the reader's imagination.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: 1912
PLACE: The Titantic

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Ensemble cast

There's enough here to understand each character's motivations. Joseph just wants an opportunity to get it right, Sophia and Teddy just want an experience they've never had, and the group of gentlemen decide to go down as gentlemen. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/puncutation mistakes. The story is easy to read.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader and sucks them in emotionally, putting us in the beginning of the sinking of the ship. The dramatic elements are played pitch-perfect. An emotional read that's well done.


Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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