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 | Bubba's Corner BBQ  [E] Best BBQ in Arkansas  |
| (3.5)| Hi JCosmos ,This review is a part of "Game of Thrones" [13+].  Overall Impression: This is a very interesting poem, dear author. It's unusual! It's a story, but also a poem, yet different to the poetic stories that I have read in the past. I cannot detect a specific form, nor rhyme. Well, I like things that are a little different, so here I am! Sam and his wife Maria are looking for a restaurant called Bubba’s Corner BBQ. They ask for directions. Turns out there are multiple ones, and the best one's not even on a corner. The food is very good, though! You worked with a very tricky prompt here. It's very specific and there were certain words that you could not use. I think you did well with it. Suggestions: I do have some suggestions, dear author. I hope that you'll find them helpful! Stanza 3:  for driections asLittle typo - driections should be directions. Stanza 6: “our GPS says there are 'our' should be Our. Five Bubba’s Corner BBQ’sI suggest changing this to five Bubba's Corner BBQs. Stanza 7: the clerk smiled 'the' should be The. There are a few more instances with sentences not starting with a capital letter in further stanzas - something to look at.Stanza 11: It is catawapmus'catawapmus' should be catawampus. Stanza 12: of Ist'Ist' should be 1st. My Rating: This is an interesting piece. Definitely something different. I did have quite a few suggestions. You have something here, but it can do with another look. For that reason, for now, I will give this a rating of 3.5 out of 5. Thank you for sharing your work. Write on! Kit   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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