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The A-Team Cake and Buster Dog  [E]
... half an hour before the birthday guests were to arrive, disaster struck ...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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Ah, so we meet again, sir. I was looking under the Family genre and saw your item and knew it would be a good one.

An excellent story of a good cake made even better by ingenuity, and “the icing on the cake” is, it’s true *Laugh* I never heard of that show, but it sounds like fun, and that party must have been a great experience for the kids. I can clearly picture the details of the cake and how the problem was solved by reshaping the scene.

You’ve told the tale in the perfect way; it’s amazing that it’s a real story, because it writes so easily. Everything is there that I might be tempted to harp on: goals, stakes and obstacles; amusing characters including a dog, a granny, a bunch of boys, a clever mom. Your formatting is great, and there’s nothing at all I can see to change. Perhaps a word count at the top would be helpful, but as I’ve been browsing the genres lately I’ve learned how to do a long press on the items on my iPad to pop up the little section with an approximate word count before I open it. (All I have to access WdC with is an iPad and two Android phones… you’d be surprised at how much can be done here on a phone. And did you know that iOS snubs Comic Sans font, substituting a ridiculously formal and almost indecipherable font called Snell Roundhand? Don’t mind me, it’s just a pet peeve…)

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *HeartG*

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