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 The Dance  [E]
My First Dance
by KingsSideCastle
Review of The Dance  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of The Dance by KingsSideCastle

I love this, both for its use of language and for its honesty. It's a little trip into the memories raised by a song, culminating in the account of a dance so realistically recounted that we can all hark back to similar times in our memories. The language used is a little higher than we use in daily speech, being precise in its choice of words and sentence construction. It results in an effortless flow that is, quite frankly, beautiful.

There is a single minor flaw that I must point out, however. You list a few experiences and then write this phrase: "...the latter was always something..." Strictly speaking, it should be "the last" as "the latter" is only used when there are two options available. It's probably not going to be noticed by the vast majority of readers, but I mention it in case you decide to change it.

The honesty in the piece is what donates its real charm. There is no attempt to dramatise the account of the dance, it being told just as it was, a fairly ordinary and a bit awkward an occurrence that, for some reason, the memory has decided to recall with perfect clarity in reponse to the song. The reader is transported back immediately to their own experience of a first dance and the piece becomes that much more real as a result.

This is truly an exquisite little jewel of the writing art and I must thank you for the experience.

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