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The Chat  [13+]
Amy knows only one way to get him calm
by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones" , I am in no way endorsing the GoT franchise or identifying as a fan thereof. I’m here to help my team win *Smile*

Good grief. What a vivid and amusing story of siblings. You’ve taken the prompt words and woven them into quite a tale. I loved and related to all the descriptive details: the unbearably hot car, the senseless vacation taken with it, the way all the characters came to life with a few well chosen words. Amy’s unexpected power over her little brother by way of that incident is carefully and politely hinted at by her noticing the local hunks. The steamy summer setting is well placed, and everything is shown in a way that engages our senses.

Formatting is perfect, with clear font, a word count and the prompt neatly included at the bottom. I would recommend adding a third genre now that the contest is over, perhaps “Environment” since you’ve described the setting so well. There’s really not much else I can think of to say about this item… hopefully little Jack isn’t permanently traumatized by his sister’s trick *Laugh*

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing! Have fun at GoT *HeartG*

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