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PUN-ishment  [E]
Which came first? The pun or the pun-ishment? A Flash Fiction Daily Winner
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Review of PUN-ishment  
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"Game of Thrones Hello fellow writer! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.
Title: PUN-ishment
First Impression: I have stumbled upon another nugget of comedy gold here. Should I wince like Oliver? I could and did groan as the plumber George did. I suspect it is an involuntary reflex. At least Tom is not overcome with the circumstances floating in his sodden basement. It takes a barrage of puns to spark the canine's reaction. He probably is thinking he is not the 'rough' one.
What needs your attention: Okay, this is not a glaring omission, or mistake, but... Yep, I espy three instances in which a comma does not precede the venerable word 'but'. Is it a hard and fast grammar rule? "Thinking of sinking basement." His basement? The basement?
What part I liked best: Okay, I will admit to guffawing at Tom's not-so-lame puns. He obviously likes to have fun with words. Why would I begrudge the guy his enjoyment? He is a go with the flow kind of fellow. I will not hurl a catcall in his direction, but I could bark, ruff, ruff. On the positive side Tom now has a pool table in his basement. I can picture Oliver swimming down there, dog paddling. This is a clever response to the prompt 'spring cleaning'. This succinct tale packs a punch and is not at all water-logged.
Overall Impression: Why not throw in a few puns? They exist and they are hilarious. If only Oliver the beagle could speak English. Is it any wonder he howls? I suspect he is thinking "oh, come on. Doggone it!" Tom may well not be punning when he receives the plumber's bill. There's potential waterworks there. I appreciate the light-hearted humour and thanks for the laughs. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure! What does the fox say? Listen carefully.
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