Hi Dave Ryan ,

I have the pleasure of reviewing your item as part of the "Game of Thrones"  anniversary reviews challenge.

Prose
This is a very fun poem in an English bawdy humour syle.

You've created a fantastic rhyming pattern, with that repeating final line adding to the musical lilt: an anticipated cymbal clash at thecend of each verse.

The line that you put in between each set of rhymed verses doesn't seem to have a rule, being of different lengths. Those lines read sort of like an authors commentary, like a whispered aside, privileged information. These additions definitely enrich the poem overall.

Favourite libe
And as I scratched my left big toe, right testicle and chin

Cause that was just darned funny and unexpected: and wot, no washing of hands?!

My Recommendations
Now that the competition is over (and you aced it) I'd love you to drop that prompt out of bright blue (perhaps italics instead), because it is quite distracting when we now read it to just enjoy.

Overall
This is a really fun read, and I like that there is dry humour to offset the ribald.

Thank you for sharing your work!


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