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 The story of the sensitive heart  [E]
A girl who was craving for love and friendship.Join us in the journey of....The Unkown.
by The Dreamer
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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Welcome to WdC! I hope you are enjoying yourself here.

I like the premise you’ve set up here, of a young lady who is kind and loving but gets none of it in return. I can see she is from a wealthy family, but we all know how little it means for the important things in life. Some of the wealthiest people are the most unhappy, with broken homes and such. Perhaps this is autobiographical? I don’t want to scare you away by making you think we’ll all assume you’re talking about yourself. Everyone writes stories of all kinds and they don’t have to be biographical, but you can feel free to pour as much of yourself into them as you want. Writing fiction can be very therapeutic.

As a beginning, I’d like to share the “magic formula” for a compelling story of any length: goals, stakes, and obstacles. It sound like anything written that way would be a trite fairytale, but when you think about it those are the three main things that drive a good story. Your character needs things to strive for, things holding her back, and things that will happen if she doesn’t get to her goals. This leaves plenty of leeway for anything you can imagine.

I would recommend using Grammarly to tidy up your sentences and make sure everything is presentable when you are ready to carry on the story. I look forward to reading whatever else you have to write.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartG*

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