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Space Wars  [13+]
There is a war going on in outer space and the aliens need your help to bring peace!
by Angelica- Happy May 5th!
Review of Space Wars  
Review by Annette
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Angelica- Happy May 5th!

First impression:

The title and intro line give everyone who comes across your contest a clear understanding of what is asked of them. The text on the forum page is nice and short, which means the rules will be clear and concise.

What works:

Right below the title, you give the starting and ending dates of the round. That is such a crucial bit of information and putting it there is possibly the best placement for it. It is such a drag to have to scour contest and activity pages to find out whether they are even open until the date can be parsed out somewhere in the middle of a large text.

I like how you used emoji dividers to break up the page into easy to read chunks. And they are all nicely short so that everything can be taken in quickly.

What needs work:

Not really anything wrong, more of a word choice comment:

Two to Five responses- best response receives a community MB. *Right* you call the entries responses to the questions within the prompt area. That makes sense. In the prize area, it would make more sense to call them "entries." And then the call the best response "the winner."
For more entries/responses, you could list first, second, and third prizes rather than the somewhat long prize descriptions you have now.

You mention a "Total pot: 110,000 GPs." Why is this here? In a contest, the amount in the bank isn't really needed for the contestants. We usually advertise the size of a gift point pot in a raffle where players want to know that they are gambling for.

Just a suggestion: offer a non-exclusive (community) merit badge for donors. That is sure to help fill your coffers.

Final thoughts:

This month's prompt is solid. I feel like I read a whole story before even writing something myself. Images of rabbits overtaking the world are both endearing and terrifying.


Annette
"The WDC Angel Army
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