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Review #4745297
Viewing a review of:
Cabin Fever  [GC]
Writings from 11/02 to 3/05.
by Fivesixer
         Review for entry/chapter: "Musing Like I Know Better" 
Review of Cabin Fever  
Review by Jayne
Rated: GC | (4.5)
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Hello, Fivesixer !

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
This is a bold and self-reflective piece that challenges conventional wisdom and societal norms through its raw and candid tone. The poem uses a conversational style to confront and deconstruct the pretenses of wisdom and understanding, effectively capturing introspective rebellion. I expected no less :)

*Checkb*Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:
Structured in free verse, the thoughts flow freely without the constraints of a strict metrical pattern. This style suits the personal and introspective nature of the content, mimicking the natural flow of thoughts. The cadence is irregular, mirroring the unpredictable nature of the speaker's musings. The poem carries the distinct voice and cadence that makes your poetry instantly recognizable.

*Checkb*Content:
Introspective, questioning, and defiant, with comparisons "screws in wood" and "scriptures," suggest a permanence or impact that is both ironic and critical. Grappling with the theme of perceived wisdom versus genuine understanding, there's a strong statement on the authenticity of self-expression.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
The grammar and mechanics are appropriate for the poem's casual, conversational tone, which is characteristic of work. However, the line "and so behold my wisdoms" could be reworded for greater impact. We're probably going to agree to disagree on punctuation, so I'm skipping over it entirely.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
This is a compelling critique of pretentiousness in self-expression and societal communications. Its rawness and the challenging of norms through personal revelation are hallmarks of what you excel at, even back in 2012 when you added it to your portfolio.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Jayne *Smile*


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