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 | The Locked Door  [13+] Benjamin learns that some doors are better left unopened  |
 This is a "Game of Thrones" review!Hello, iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen!  Overall Impression:This story is so well-crafted as it combines elements of suspense, science fiction, and deep emotional trauma. It effectively builds tension and curiosity, leading to a dramatic and heart-wrenching revelation that challenges the boundaries between reality and ethical boundaries in coping with loss. Title and Description: The title "The Locked Door" sets the stage for a mystery, while the description hints at the darker, profound implications of what lies behind it. The story delivers on this promise by exploring the emotional and ethical complexities associated with grief and the lengths to which individuals might go to stop their pain. Hook and plot:Through the eyes of Benjamin, whose innocent curiosity and detailed observations draw the reader into the mystery of the locked door. The pacing is excellent, with just enough detail to keep the reader engaged and guessing until the climactic moment when the truth is revealed. Characters and dialogue:Benjamin is portrayed realistically, with the natural curiosity of a child mixed with a growing sense of unease. His father's character is complex and well-developed, depicted through his actions and minimal dialogue, which adds to the mysterious atmosphere. The dialogue overall is natural and appropriate, given the stressful undercurrent of the story. Grammar and Mechanics:The story is well-written, and the effective use of descriptive language enhances the eerie and suspenseful mood. While I think you could streamline some areas, particularly in the scenes leading up to the climax, it didn't affect the overall readability or impact of the story. Final Thoughts:This is one of those moral quandary stories that hits the reader hard. It will undoubtedly stay with them long after they've finished it. Thank you for sharing your work with us! Jayne   My approach to reviews: "I'll Explain, but not Disclaim" The views and opinions in this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and, therefore, do not necessarily reflect the group, activity, and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.
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You responded to this review 04/16/2024 @ 1:57am EDT