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Rude Awakening  [13+]
A drummer's last gig.
by Beholden
Review of Rude Awakening  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Free Folk  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello Beholden

I'm sending this review in connection with "Game of Thrones.


*Penw* Positives

The story captures the atmosphere of a live concert with vivid detail. Terry Hanley’s character is thoroughly explored, making his journey from retirement to rejuvenated passion a compelling arc. The narrative effectively uses the crowd's reaction and the band's dynamic performance to reach a powerful resolution where Terry realizes his deep connection to his music and his bandmates. This pivotal moment is both emotionally charged and satisfying, highlighting the transformative power of music and performance.


*Penw* Suggestions

For me, some descriptions, particularly of the band members entering the stage, could be streamlined to maintain narrative pacing. Also, I think introducing more dialogue among the band members could provide deeper insights into their relationships and add layers to the concert experience. I'd suggest potentially incorporating a bit of backstory about Terry’s career and previous challenges to make his final decision even more poignant.


*Penw* Overall

This story is an effective exploration of a musician facing the twilight of his career, set against the backdrop of a live performance that reminds him why he fell in love with music in the first place. It successfully combines the sensory details of sound, sight, and emotion to create a memorable narrative. Terry’s realization that he is not yet ready to give up the life that defines him is handled well, making the story’s conclusion uplifting and inspiring.


Respectfully,

Jeff
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