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Review #4745426
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 Delicate Princess   [E]
Eight line poem
by Sumojo
Review by Cubby
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Tulipp* Greetings, Sumojo! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2024. *Smile* As always, it's a pleasure to read your writing!

*Quill* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Tulipo* What I Liked


         *Bulletv* You've written a great description of a delicate princess, following the prompt: Write a delicate poem from Express it in Eight. The phrases in the first stanza: delicate disposition, easily hurt, slight as an apparition definitely gives the reader the idea that this princess is delicate! Then, in the second stanza, the reader discovers she is also a spoiled princess! *Wink*

         *Bulletg* And my favorite line is...She wants, she gets. Don’t try to deny her *Bigsmile* Love it!


*Tulipo* Suggestions/Comments to Consider

         desert *Right* dessert I used to get these two confused till I read somewhere to think of the 2nd s as a 2nd helping of dessert. And that's how I remember. *Laugh*

         see through *Right* see-through I'm not always sure about hyphenated words, so I looked this one up on Google: ""See-through" is a hyphenated compound adjective.."

         *Note* Not sure if you purposely left out the period at the end of this poem, or not. If so, just disregard this! Since you used punctuation throughout this piece, I thought it worth at least mentioning. *Wink*


*Tulipo* Final Thoughts

         What a fun little piece you've created, Sue! I had no problem at all visualizing this delicate little spoiled princess. *Laugh* An enjoyable read, for certain.


Have a great day and...*Quill*
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