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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm

"Game of Thrones"  Hello fellow writer! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.Title: A Ghostly PoemFirst Impression: This is not at all what I anticipated. The ghosts, a young boy and girl, seem to want to play and interact with the writer's children. There is no malicious , malevolent intent. They seem to be like living children, curious, active, mischievous. They are still occupying their family home. Over time the ghosts are accepted and adopted into the family of the current residents. What needs your attention: Nothing. I did not notice any obvious spelling errors and such.What part I liked best: Reading this aloud I noted the rhymes. They are pleasing to my ear and do not seem forced, or awkward. This poem relates a story. A house requiring renovations/touch-ups is discovered by a new family who move in to make it their own. Surprise, they are approached by the apparitions of former residents. There is a happy ending in which the two little ghosts are accepted and loved as if part of the existing family. I like the air of optimism radiated from the fourth stanza. "The apparitions of children in all their splendor." Yes, I know 'splendor' rhymes with 'door', but this a wonderful way of describing ghosts. The writer shows her love for wee folk, living and deceased. "So now I had two more children." Meh, the narrator seems to say. What are two more? "We lived there together and we all got along. This home sweet home is where the little tykes will always belong." This inclusion is beautiful. There is always more than enough love to go around. Overall Impression: This is a heartfelt piece of poetry exuding a mother's love and compassion. A home can be created anywhere and shelter anyone seeking its safe haven. I wonder how an illustrator would envision these two ghosts? Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure! What does the fox say??? Listen carefully.(2133 characters) DISCLAIMER: The views and opinions in this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.