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Night of the Fireflies  [13+]
Andrea captures something more than she bargained for
by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" .

*Reading* Great job with the prompt! It looks like it was a fun write. *Smile* It's a tale full of magic, mystery, suspense, and fantasy. I
t was creative and imaginative. Nice job!

The Title and Description - Excellent title. It compliments the story perfectly. Fabulous description that catches one's attention and urges them to read on!

The Storyline/Plot - A little girl is camping, and comes up with a plan, to catch some fireflies. Her plan works nicely and she captures five in a jar. While looking at her fireflies, she falls asleep. She is awakened by a small voice, and is shocked when she finds out where the tiny voice is coming from!

The Characters - We're able to get to know the little girl's heart and personality through your words. Well done. *Smile*

The Setting - Excellent job with the setting. We're able to envision each scene as we read.

Whar I Liked Best - I love the little girl's thoughts when deciding whether to let them out of the jar or not. It's a legitimate concern. *Laugh* I also liked the visual of using the fireflies for the light in the dark tent.

Thank you for sharing your writing with us. It's a cute story and would make a wonderful children's book!

*Heart* Tracey

"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister
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